EVALUATION FINISHED

Final editing

This was suppose to be an establishing shot just after the picnic scene but now we decided to put the title of our film over this scene as it fits really well

Evaluation

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final opening sequence

audience interviews

Movie opening plot and props

Bike/Nan scene shooting

Picnic Shooting

On Thursday 17th of March we went to York House Gardens to film our picnic scene as planned. Ronni, Mohammed and Tamsyn went to York Gardens before me. Because I went to get the sandwiches for the picnic that Mohammed (Ajmal) and Ronnie (Nancy) were going to have. When I got there Mohammed, Ronni and Tamsyn. had already set up the scene with the blanket/matt on the floor and the basket beside it to make it look like picnic. As soon as I got there i cut the sandwiches and put them into the basket and we were ready to shoot. I started vlogging my group as we filmed. The story board was really helpful as we kept referring back to it.


Our second scene was also in York house Gardens by the green. It was a bridge where Mohammed and Nancy walked across the bridge. We started off with an establishing shot of the scene and then we showed the couple walking down the bridge under the sun. We recorded ambience noises which helped us for the opening of the scene as it was more realistic out in the open.


We finished the shoot by 10.55 and were on the way back to school for 11AM. we got to chool pcked up the equipment and were 5 minutes late to lesson.

Plan for shoot

On Thursday 17th of march we plan on going York House Garden for our double study session lesson to film our picnic scene for our film forbidden. We have chosen this time and date because the weather will be perfect for the scene we are planning to shoot. We plan on getting ready just before 9AM before registration, Mohammed and Ronnie will get dressed and get into character. As soon as they are ready we need to be on route to York gardens and set up the scene for the shoot. We will film our scene and will need to be back to school by 11AM. York is a brilliant location for us as it is only a 5-10 minutes walk away from our school so we will have plenty of time to film.


The equipment we will need:

• Costume for our characters
• Picnic basket
• Camera
• tri pod
• blanket/matt
• Sandwiches

Titles

Today we had to discuss about the order we place the titles in our films and we ended up writing the order and the names we will use. 

We also decided to use a type write title with a sound effect of a type writer that fit will together for our films name forbidden. Although we haven’t made a final decision if we will use this type writer effect for the rest of the titles that will appear.  

Start of editing

Today we started editing our shots together but however because we haven't finished filming all of our scenes so we have gaps in the edits with notes on what needs to go there.

This is a shot of our editing, we found that we didn't shoot the bit of the letter falling out of Nancy's bag so we need to re shoot and add another shot from a birds eye view of the letter falling out of the bag.



Call sheet

Beginning of shooting

On Monday we filmed Nancy's parents reacting to the loud noise coming from her room and the scenes when her Mother finds a letter from Ajmal. We began preparing the hair, make up and props around 3pm and began filming around 5pm. This was not the planned time however the preparation took longer than expected. Due to the sun setting around this time we had to use our phone torches as clear lighting. It took quite a few attempts to get the close up shots correct as i had to make sure the actors did the exact same movements from different angles. It was also difficult to films the actors found it quite amusing in some parts of filming. I think the scene of Nancy's parents noticing the music went very well because the props i found around my house which suited the era of time made the scene very affected. I am also very pleased with the mies-en-scene of the costumes because we managed to make it took very 50's from my mums jiving dress and rollers in her hair.

Location Ideas

Bedroom

Having chose our film time period to be set in the 1950s we have to make the locations we are using to look like the chosen time period as it will make our scenes look realistic and the audience will be able to tell this film is not set in the modern era.

Bridge

This bridge on top of a river near we live could be a great location to film Ajmal riding his bike to Nancy’s. Showing how we have to to care with the exterior shots we take as they also have to represent the 1950s

Bed

The colour of this bedroom is perfect for our scene in the bedroom as the colour symbolises love. This is good for our scene as the colour fits in with the stereotypical colours of beds in the 1950s and it is a living atmosphere, perfect for when Nancy and Ajmal are in it.

Kitchen

This is a typical kitchen in the affluent family in London in the 1950s and as we have described Nancy’s family as being wealthy, this would be a perfect kitchen to use. luckily Tamsyns has a kitchen with the same layout although not all the features being old fashioned so we would have to be careful what to get in the shots and what not to get in.

Kitchen Table

This picture gives an idea of the table and set out we are able to use as in our one we could have tamsyns parents set on a table just alike the one in the picture with many 1950s objects around them.

York House

York house in twickenham is the location we have chosen to use for our little picnic scene with Ajmal and Nancy. It is a public place so we are able to use it.

Beginning of shooting

Date; 17th Feb

We organised to meet at at Tamsyns at 3pm and it did not take us long to start filming as Ronnis costume and hair have already been done by Tamsyns. All that has to be done was for me to help Mohammed wear his costume and do his hair. As we planned to film Nancys bit of walking up the stairs and dropping the letter we decided to do that first. It was hard to know exactly where to place the camera to get the best shots so we took it from many different angles and made sure that we did not break the 180 degree rule. What we found most difficult was getting the letter to drop from Nancys bag while she was walking up the stairs. We resulted this by having her slightly tip the letter with her hand to make it drop. In addition to this we also had to make sure that the letter fell on the 5th step as the scene we did before this we had Nancys mum pick it up from there, so for continuity reasons that had to be done.

For next time we know that we should leave more time for filming as for just that scene it took all our shooting time and we were not able to get the shots of Ajmal sneaking in through the window done. Although this still helpd us as we saw that the costumes chosen for both characters were a good fit to the era we have chosen and looked good on camera.

Script

Script:

Untitled period drama

By Anmol, Tamsyn, Mohammed and Ronni

INT. NANCY’S OFFICE. DAY

A typewriter is being struck by a lady with aged hands. Hyperbolic sounds of the typewriter striking the page. A ring is clearly visible on one of the hands.

Dissolve into:

INT. NANCYS BEDROOM 1950s. DAY

The modern room and the sound of the typewriter fades and we find a young girl in front of a mirror, adjusting her make up. This is NANCY. 17; she is sophisticated and beautiful.

TITLECARD: LONDON 1956 (in typewriter style font)

OLD NANCY:

(VO)

Dear AJMAL

I remember the way you made me feel when we were younger. The excitement, the happiness you brought me.

Young Nancy and Young Ajmal, a young handsome dark eyed man, are in a park, enjoying a picnic, cuddling and both smiling. They are in front of a grand house on a sunny day.

EXT. OUTSIDE RESTURANT OR CAFÉ

Ajmal and Nancy are holding hands; he puts his arm behind her back and leads her into the restaurant. He looks around slyly with a worried look on his face.

INT. INSIDE THE RESTAURANT

Sitting at the table, with flowers and candles.

OLD NANCY

(VO CONT.)

Do you remember the day we stole away to Bruno’s?

Ajmal gives Nancy a letter with a promise ring inside, (the same one we saw on her old hands). There is a worried look on Ajmal’s face and a big smile on Nancy’s face.

OLD NANCY

(VO CONT.)

Every time I do something and notice my ring glistening it brings back the happiest moment of my youth. However, I get sad because it reminds me you really did want to spend the rest of your life with me.

Present (old) Nancy is still typing a letter, we see the ring again.

OLD NANCY

(VO CONT.)

By this time of the evening I knew you would be leaving your house, on your bicycle.

The sound of rain (in the background). Ajmal is riding a bicycle in the rain. There is a close up of the bicycle wheel splashing through a puddle.

OLD NANCY:

(VO CONT.)

The sneaking around gave us a dramatic sensational feeling romantic film, the love movie of the century that had people crying when walking the cinema.

Ajmal sneaks though Nancy’s bedroom window off the roof extension. He is drenched with rain water, there is an excited look on his face. They are looking into each others eyes with happiness.

Ajmal puts on a record to make noise cover up their sneaking around.

OLD NANCY:

(VO CONT.)

The record we repeatedly played is still going round in my head. I imagined it to once be our wedding song for our first dance.

DONNA, Nancy’s mother, brown haired, sophisticated and smartly dressed. GEORGE, Nancy’s father, grey haired, unconcerned and work focused. They notice the music and look at the ceiling confused.

Ajmal and Nancy are looking into each others eyes, Nancy goes to take Ajmal’s top off as the focus switches to the candles in the corner of them room.

Nancy arrives home, running upstairs as the letter Ajmal gave her falls out of her bag onto the stairs. Nancy doesn’t notice.

OLD NANCY:

(VO CONT.)

I should’ve known this little bubble of happiness would come to an end at one point. I guess it was too good to be true. If only I had been more careful.

Donna notices the letter on the stairs and picks it up with a confused look on her face. The letter is signed ‘from you love, Ajmal’.

Donna and George are standing above Nancy as she sits down in the kitchen. They are screaming at Nancy and Donna is pointing her finger close to Nancy’s face.

OLD NANCY:

(VO CONT.)

From that day on our life together began change.

Nancy has tears rolling down her face.

Storyboard final version

In this shot we have Ajmal sneaking through
the window into Nancy's house

A different shot we would like to add of Ajmal
sneaking into Nancy's house.

This is a shot of Nancy's parents at the kitchen table while
Nancy and Ajmal are upstairs.

A low angle shot of Ajmal when he is
entering Nancy's house through the window,
we thought this was a good shot to include
in our real video.

This is a different scene where Nancy has just
come back home from a day out with Ajmal
and has a letter that he has given to her.

Nancy's mum hears the noise upstairs and
has a doubt something fishy is going on
upstairs.

Close up of the letter to show it is the same
letter Ajmal gave to Nancy.

This is a shot of Nancy going up the
stairs just before she drops the
letter.

Plan for the shoot

Date: Wednesday 17th February 2016,

We decided to film Nancy's scene of her dropping the letter on the stairs as she walks up. We will make sure we have all the costumes at Tamsyn's house before hand so we don't waste any time. We also plan to do the scene of her walking through the door. On this day we also plan to do the scene where Mohammed jumps in through the window. We plan to meet again on 3pm as it is a convenient time for everybody, however, Ronni who is one of our main characters might have to get their earlier as she has to do her hair and makeup.

Interview of people for target audience

http://youtu.be/zXICL2H-xvM

From this i have learnt that different ages have different prefrences for example some of the people prefrered to be introduced to the main characters at the start rather than the setting and vice versa. Although the setting is our main focus to emphasise the setting and show the audience we have understood the time period we are in.

Interview for target audience

From this i have learned that too make it more interesting we were able to make the interviewers look in different directions and edit them looking in opposite ways.

This helped me learn that our target audience would like too be introduced to our main characters at the beginning rather than the setting, although setting in our opening scene is still a main factor as it creates the atmosphere and makes our audience feel like their in that specific time period.

Voiceover

This is our draft of the voice over, she is writing a letter to her ex-lover and that is what is being read aloud:

Dear Ajmal,

I still write to you every day hoping one day you will write back.

(type writer)

I remember the way you made me feel back when we were young. The excitement, the happiness you brought me..(pause)..

(ronni and mo hugging or staring into each others eyes)

The sneeking around gave us a dramatic, sensational feeling, like we were in a romantic film.. the love movie of the century which had people in tears when walking out the cinema!

(ronins old eye - sound bride into rain- graphic match)

By this time i knew you would be leaving your house, on your bicycle, avoiding the road my parents take. Its that time of the week, tick tock..(pause).. tick tock. five to six pm. the time i looked forward to all week. Friday evening. (show parents leaving) 

(close up of the bike wheel or mo on bike)

Character profiles

Character profiles

AJMAL (MAIN BOY) 
Name: Ajmal
Age: young (19)
Nationality: Afghan
Hometown: Kabul
Current Residence: London
Occupation: Street performer/busking
Eye Colour: Dark eyes
Hair Colour: Dark (brown/black)
Skin Colour: Tanned
Distinguishing features: Facial hair
How does he/she dress?: Casual/smart/scruffy
Habits: (smoking, drinking etc.) No
Hobbies: Sing/play the guitar
Speech patterns: Can not speak very good english
Personal traits:  Not very well spoken. He is really happy, friendly, bubbly and loving.
Very smart, but doesn’t have a good occupation due to him being
an immigrant. Lonely, as his family is not with him so deep
down he is sad and upset and slightly jealous of Nancy and her family.

NANCY (MAIN GIRL)
Name: Nancy
Age: young (17)  old (64)
Nationality: White British
Hometown: London
Current Residence: London
Occupation: Nothing
Eye Colour: Blue
Hair Colour: Blonde
Skin Colour: White
Distinguishing features: Natural make up
How does he/she dress?: Smart/casual
Habits: (smoking, drinking etc.) No
Hobbies: Writing
Speech patterns: None
Personal traits: Ignorant because she doesn’t care what her family and other people think of
                          her. She is disobedient because she is going against her parents by going for a
                          different race and status. Well-educated, as you can tell because she is good at
speaking and writing. Upper class, because of her family status shown through
the mise-en-scene.

DONNA (NANCYS MUM)  
Name: Donna
Age: 44
Nationality: White British
Hometown: London
Current Residence: London
Occupation: House-wife
Eye Colour: Brown
Hair Colour: Brown/burban
Skin Colour: White
Distinguishing features: Glasses
How does he/she dress?: Smart/casual
Habits: (smoking, drinking etc.) No
Hobbies: Cleaning/cooking
Speech patterns: None

Personal traits: She is snobby strict and  because she is over protective and looking down on                               her daughter for going for a boy of a different race and class. She is selfish

                          because she doesn’t care about her daughters feelings. Embarrassed/self

                          conscious because of peoples opinions oner her due to her daughters behaviour.

GEORGE (NANCYS DAD)
Name: George
Age: 46
Nationality: White British
Hometown: London
Current Residence: London
Occupation: Banker
Eye Colour: BrownHair Colour: Grey
Skin Colour: White
Distinguishing features: None
How does he/she dress?: Smart, suit
Habits: (smoking, drinking etc.) No
Hobbies: Fitness
Speech patterns: None
Personal traits: 

Prop Ideas

This chair we were thinking could be used for the old Nancy to sit on while she is typing in the opening scene, however It could turn out to be too low so we would have to think of other props which we are able to get a hold off. 

This is the type of typewriter we are thinking of using. We are still thinking of which one to use mine or misses we would have to see which one fits better in our opening scene as we would need a close up of this specific prop. 

This prop would fit perfectly with our time period and in our movie as we are thinking we can use it in Nancy’s room while Ajmal is sneaking in to her room. 

Initial planning ideas

Initial planning ideas

Here is a sheet of the initial planning we did for our coursework task. Our group consists of Ronni, Mo and I. The ideas we like most is a historical genre, a voice over and starting at the end and flashing back.

voice over

This is our draft of the voice over, she is writing a letter to her ex-lover and that is what is being read aloud:

Dear Ajmal,
I still write to you every day hoping one day you will write back.
(type writer)
I remember the way you made me feel back when we were young. The excitement, the happiness you brought me..(pause)..
(ronni and mo hugging or staring into each others eyes)
The sneeking around gave us a dramatic, sensational feeling, like we were in a romantic film.. the love movie of the century which had people in tears when walking out the cinema!
(ronins old eye - sound bride into rain- graphic match)
By this time i knew you would be leaving your house, on your bicycle, avoiding the road my parents take. Its that time of the week, tick tock..(pause).. tick tock. five to six pm. the time i looked forward to all week. Friday evening. (show parents leaving) 
(close up of the bike wheel or mo on bike)

Plot Ideas 2

Plot line: Forbidden love story, set in the 50's, between an immigrant, Ajmal, and a white girl, Nancy. 


1. When Martha sugar, the younger daughter of Lord sugar, finds her older sister Beth having an affair with the son of the servant Oliver she goes and tells her father who doesn't believe her after he asking Beth who lies to him. From this Martha is thinking she is trying to stop her sister from doing anything stupid like running away with a servant which will bring shame on the family just creates a tension between her and her sister when Beth finds out Martha is in love with Oliver too.

2. A love triangle between a woman and two best friends. They struThere is conflict between the best friends whilst dealing with family issues and a pregnancy but who is the father?

3. A secret love story of a black servant in love with her white master, set in 1852, he is not stereotypically strict towards her. He is surprised by the truth she reveals from her past and struggles to deal with her revealing her love for him. Taking in the fact he will be judged by society will he return the love she deeply feels for him?

4. An women Nancy, in the 60's,  falls in love and runs away with a son, of the feuding family in that era. The conflict between the family increases between the feuding families and causes the lovers to be torn apart.

Brief storyboard:

• Starts with the productions company and titles

• Voice over all of the opening sequence 

• Starts with Ronni (old) typing a dated letter to ex-lover (Mo) on the typewriter, with the special ring on 

• Cut to Mo and Ronni (young) we see the same ring on

• Mo sneaks through the window to Ronni's house

• They then lean in to kiss

• Cuts back to old women talking (voiceover) she talks about getting excited to see Mo every weekend

• Cut to Ronni's parents shouting at her for being with Mo 

• Firework scene 

• Typing film name with a type writer 

Plot Ideas

Other plots;
1)
One idea could be that our main character  has just fled  his countryside home and went in to the city for a better living and job carer and even through the struggle of his journey he meets a girl which turns out to be going to the same place. Even though they were from completely different backgrounds she helps him get comfortable In the city and shows us how they both end up together and the plot twist is then revealed and we are told the true story behind why he had to flee his home what will this do to the relationship between the two?
2)
An women Nancy, in the 60’s, falls in love and runs away with a son, of the feuding family in that era. The conflict between the family increases between the feuding families and causes the lovers to be torn apart.
3)
A secret love of a black maid in love with her white master, the boss of the family house. The truth is then revealed to the family, after finding a note written to him, that mysteriously escaped the maids barn.
4)
When Martha sugar, the younger daughter of Lord sugar, finds her older sister Beth having an affair with the son of the servant Oliver she goes and tells her father who doesn’t believe her after he asking Beth who lies to him. From this Martha is thinking she is trying to stop her sister from doing anything stupid like running away with a servant which will bring shame on the family just creates a tension between her and her sister when Beth finds out Martha is in love with Oliver too.
 5)A secret love story of a black servant in love with her white master, set in 1852, he is not stereotypically strict towards her. He is surprised by the truth she reveals from her past and struggles to deal with her revealing her love for him. Taking in the fact he will be judged by society will he return the love she deeply feels for him? 6)A love triangle between a woman and two best friends. There is conflict between the best friends whilst dealing with family issues and a pregnancy but who is the father?